Ken Yoshino in his essay about covering, focus on how people hide from who they really are. Yoshino talks about how people hide behind there false self to protect their true self. He discuss how wrong it is and how we need to be in a world where people can’t be afraid of what they are saying or doing, or just to express who they truly are. In the essay Yoshino makes many claims due to the idea of covering and people hiding. Yoshino states, “…the persistence of the covering demand presents a puzzle”(539) Basically Yoshino is informing other people that you hide yourself from specific people and show your true self to other people. Like Yoshino explained himself a gay Asian, he presented him self a gay Asian to some and to others he presented himself a straight Asian. I agree with Yoshino claim, because I think everyone’s social life is a example of a puzzle. When you are with different friends you act differently, therefore you are a puzzle where you have to think about where you are going to fit into the puzzle with that group. Whether you think of your social life as a puzzle or not, there should be no need to decided where you fit into the puzzle and when you can truly be yourself. People shouldn’t have to hide behind their false self, and should be able to truly express, or say or do what they want with feeling welcomed and safe in the environment they are in.
In the essay Yoshino composed about covering, and people not being treated equally he also touched on the idea that groups of people aren’t treated equally. In the essay he explains how in the courts other groups can be treated differently and have different outcomes not based on the situation but based on what groups they are a part of. In the essay Yoshino makes many claims based on how groups are treated differently. Yoshino states, “Group-Based identity politics is not dead”(544) Basically Yoshino wants others to know that depending what group you are apart of or who you express yourself as may change the outcome of the situation your arguing. For example going to court and having one person be gay and one person be straight, the straight person could have more accommodations or a better outcome than the gay person just due to the fact how they identify. I can relate and agree with Yoshino on this claim from doing cheering in high school. In high school the cheerleaders were always treated more poorly then the football players because cheering was labeled as not a sport in high school. No matter what group you are apart of, every group should be treated the same and only the situation should be assessed on the situation.
In Anne Hallward’s ted talk, she expresses the idea of shame. Anne describes shame on a deeper level, and how just a small little thing to others can connect to someone way deeper and leading horrific outcomes. Anne plants the idea in our head that shame is a public health threat, Anne makes many claims of what the outcomes could be. In Anne’s view, “It’s also at the heart of suicide”(3:19) In making this comment Anne urges us that shame is the leading cause of why people want to commit suicide. People have so much shame that eats at them that they only way to over come the shame is too just end their life. With knowing people that have gone to the same school and family members that have committed suicide, to knowing people that have wanted to commit suicide it plants this idea in my head. The idea that gets planted is after watching and listening to this ted talk, “Is this why they wanted to commit/committed is because they felt a tremendous amount of shame that they couldn’t express?” Its a question I guess I will always have but really can’t ask. From this ted talk, Anne wants to let people know that it is okay to just let you voice out and talk about the shame you have bottled up. Shame needs to be talked about so it doesn’t lead to the horrific outcomes.
During Anne Hallward’s ted talk she talks about how deep shame is and what it leads too but she also mentions how people who feel shame need to have a solid person they can trust and talk too. She expresses how this person needs to be there for them. Anne makes many claims of how this needs to happen and how it can work. Anne states “They suffer the most and they suffer alone”(7:14) In making this comment Anne urges us that how people suffer from the shame they hold close to them, and how since they hold it so close to them they suffer alone. After making this claim, Anne explains that in order for them to stop suffer alone, they need to have a relationship with someone that they can trust and know that they will always be there for them. I can connect this to my sister as she is a recovering drug addict, and often feels shame for being that way and what she has missed in life. I often find myself being one of those people for my sister and listening to what she is ashamed of doing. Although you may not know what the person has gone through on a personal level, all they need is to have someone support them through expressing the shame.
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Mary Katherine Spain
“In the essay Yoshino composed about covering, and people not being treated equally he also touched on the idea that groups of people aren’t treated equally.”
Is this your claim sentence? I don’t think you need to mention Yoshino or Hallward in the Topic sentence.
Sample/option: What about: “Oftentimes, people are not treated equally, despite the celebration of diversity that we claim in this country.”
“During Anne Hallward’s ted talk she talks about how deep shame is and what it leads too but she also mentions how people who feel shame need to have a solid person they can trust and talk too.” I think you summarized Anne Howard’s message nicely and showed your understanding of what she was trying to convince her audience to believe. I think it would be even better if you put the sentence as your own thought (not mentioning Howard in the topic) and shortened it up to just “Shame is a deep feeling and can build up to become a serious issue for people.”
“In the essay Yoshino composed about covering, and people not being treated equally he also touched on the idea that groups of people aren’t treated equally.”
This I san amazing sentence, but I suggest removing the “he also touched on the idea that groups of people aren’t treated equally” because it’s a bit repeative.
“Anne describes shame on a deeper level, and how just a small little thing to others can connect to someone way deeper and leading horrific outcomes.” I honestly like this sentence because a version of shame for me is close to a deeper level, and people can connect to different levels, which can lead to very bad things. I really do like this statement because it talks about how everyone is affected by shame. A possible suggestion is maybe add to the last sentence of paragraph 3. It was also very good.
“In the essay Yoshino composed about covering, and people not being treated equally he also touched on the idea that groups of people aren’t treated equally.”
Is this your claim sentence? I don’t think you need to mention Yoshino or Hallward in the Topic sentence.
Sample/option: What about: “Oftentimes, people are not treated equally, despite the celebration of diversity that we claim in this country.”
“During Anne Hallward’s ted talk she talks about how deep shame is and what it leads too but she also mentions how people who feel shame need to have a solid person they can trust and talk too.” I think you summarized Anne Howard’s message nicely and showed your understanding of what she was trying to convince her audience to believe. I think it would be even better if you put the sentence as your own thought (not mentioning Howard in the topic) and shortened it up to just “Shame is a deep feeling and can build up to become a serious issue for people.”
“In the essay Yoshino composed about covering, and people not being treated equally he also touched on the idea that groups of people aren’t treated equally.”
This I san amazing sentence, but I suggest removing the “he also touched on the idea that groups of people aren’t treated equally” because it’s a bit repeative.
“Anne describes shame on a deeper level, and how just a small little thing to others can connect to someone way deeper and leading horrific outcomes.” I honestly like this sentence because a version of shame for me is close to a deeper level, and people can connect to different levels, which can lead to very bad things. I really do like this statement because it talks about how everyone is affected by shame. A possible suggestion is maybe add to the last sentence of paragraph 3. It was also very good.
“Shame needs to be talked about so it doesn’t lead to the horrific outcomes.”
Here’s your claim sentence! Move this to the front line!